'In the Nursery' Feedback

Year 8 Whole-class feedback 5/12/2019

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If word processing, put your name on the essay!!!
Use colons (:) NOT semicolons (;) to isolate words.	Commas Use after adverbs such as ‘Secondly,’ Use ‘gapping’ commas when a phrase interrupts the flow of a sentence
Begin your analytical paragraphs with topic sentences (avoid starting paragraphs with quotations) A topic sentence should directly answer the question and summarise the content of your analytical paragraph / argument Integrate quotations within your paragraph	‘implies’ – when the text suggests something to the reader ‘infers’ – when the reader can find information in the text ‘effect’ is the noun ‘affect’ is the verb
Analysis Analysing punctuation is sometimes relevant, but it’s rarely going to be your main point. When picking out key words from your original quotation, you still need to use inverted commas.	Academic style Call it a ‘novel’ not a ‘book’ Punctuate the title as, “The Woman in Black” (double speech marks for a novel’s title, or write it in italics when word processing) Refer to the character, ‘the woman in black’ in the lower case but with inverted commas Stay consistently in the present tense. Never say, ‘it grabs the reader’s attention’ Quotations cannot stand alone as a sentence. Say, ‘quotation’, not, ‘quote’.
Explanations Avoid words like ‘thing’ and ‘something’ Avoid! It tells you what is going to happen next You shouldn’t need to use italics or inverted commas or capitalisation for emphasis – rely on your choice of words. If you find yourself using the word, ‘again’, then you are probably repeating yourself: avoid!	Introduction Try to express an overarching argument in answer to the question of your essay It is quite a good idea to briefly summarise the events in the chapter, ‘In the Nursery’
Interpretations Use words like ‘might’ or ‘could’ to soften your interpretations – it’s good to show that you are aware that there could be counter arguments	Apostrophe rule ‘reader’s mind’ ‘Kipps’ senses’
Techniques dramatic irony – when the reader knows that is going to happen next, but the characters in the story don’t naïve narrator – a narrator who is deliberately kept ignorant of key information. This term is also used when story is told from a child’s point of view. Only use a technique once.	Proofread for omission If word processing, always do your proofreading on a hard copy Try to avoid ending sentences with a preposition. ‘Suspenseful’ is not a word.
In front of (3 words) Use full stops to avoid the comma splice Introduce quotations with colons (NOT semicolons)	Spelling Effective Rhythmic Mechanical Tangible referring